Aka-san

hmmmm, I'm not too sure of other third person pov, but you know in yahair how hachiman has his quotes before the show? sorta like that. His word were out there, but his face didn't show

Well that's just be being considerate. Really, I consider everyone my friend after talking to them once. *__* What's your favorite Anime/Manga? c:

Why than you. c: I'm sorry if I sent the invitation right away too fast. .__. I tried responding back to you but your profile was set to "friends only" so I couldn't respond without being your friend first.. UNTIL I saw the "reply" link on the very bottom of your comment.. lol

Third person is common in manga its for story driven manga, it happen in betweeen scene from the narrator. You don't see it often because it boring. Now is this the age of swords and magic, or more in the future? I'm glad I'm seeing more of your ideas. Now the only problem is how you present it. I will honestly say that the toughest part you have right now. You have to super condense it so everyone can follow and read it.

Is there a heroine? haha that was my first thought on it if your drawing manga. hmmm why did valor travel to earth? Whose point of view is on, " What will reach ken first" ken? holy order? third person? and the battle on terra hasn't started yet, it first happening on earth no? I don't know if this is me but it seem pretty plain, cut out story. "boy with destiny because of his ancestor and now he has to save the world", you should try to add more idea. like is hell really evil and what not or heavan is corrupt blah blah blah. ANyway to conclude its a good start, but no where complete you should do better to pull the readers in. P.s This is ONE amatur person advice, it better to find more than one person to follow advice from.