Old Soul
Maya @maydragon
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Old Soul
Maya @maydragon
Is it possible to be born old?
Many children may think
That their grandparents
Were born like this
That they are meant to be old
To take care if the bold
Not to see what the youth can see
But what about the soul?
Can a child feel old?
Can jazz and old films
Show the past and nostalgy
That the children have never seen?
Why is it possible
That a young girl
Can miss the times
She never had before?
Or when a young man
Wishes for his wife
To live a little bit more
More than he can even go?
Are human beigns
Always like this?
Forever young at their hearts
And at the same time -
Beign old souls?
11.7.2015
azumakazuma @azumakazuma
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azumakazuma @azumakazuma
That's an interesting poem. I think it holds some truth in a way. People can have different levels of maturity or understanding that do not match their physical age.
For criticisms' sake, but keep in mind that I'm not a writer:
Or when a young man
Wishes* for his wife
To live a little bit more
More than even* he can go
Maya @maydragon
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Maya @maydragon
Aye, thanks for criticism and correcting my misspelling!
The other line is more of artistic choice, I wanted to have string stressed "he" put in beginning so that other feet and rhythm will feel like fading away.
azumakazuma @azumakazuma
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azumakazuma @azumakazuma
I thought that may have been the case.
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