A story or whatever...

As he sees a girl walking down the repulsive ally he grins. His eyes turn red, and he grabs the girl's arm with his talents. Suddenly blood goes everywhere, and he is eating her arm. The girl starts to scream holding her arm, which is not there. She sees the blood freaking out. The pain is unbearable. Suddenly his teeth sink into her neck. He pounced on her. He chews on her flesh with teeth sharper than a shark's teeth. He licks her cheek, as she chocks on her own blood. He eats the rest of her as if he hasn't eaten in years. His eyes change back, and he holds up his hands. Looking at the body, tasteing the blood, seeing his hands. He freaks out. He begins to cry, "What am I?" escapes from his mouth.

I think you need add to the actuall story or plot. Right now it is more of a scene or event and we don´t really get a lot of it. Of course as an intro or sypnosis it would be ok. If you want to write more try writing down stuff everyday. I used to have these ideas of great stories but usually forgot about them. And even if someone is saying that you lack talent or it is shit, don´t give up. If you want to write more you should also read more. It usually helps with learning new words or phrases and how to write the structure. Last year i wrote a short story about a man waking up at a strangers house right across where he lived and found his family killed. The event´s was explained throught flashbacks and a conversation with a bartender. Well it turned out his "family" didn´t belong to him, instead they belonged to another man and the "strangers house" was his own. He made himself believe he was part of that family as he was in love with the wife but when she got married he thought she cheated on him. after killing the family he forgot about it and his own life was overwritten. He was later arrested. Sorry i kinda got into writing it. But keep writing and if you want post it here. Or try having someone you trust read it. I had my old teacher read my stuff and submitted two of them to awards. None of them made it but i got a lot of comments who liked it.

Thankz dude... I was 3/4 asleep when I wrote this, so yeah...lol. I was thinking of taking Tokyo Ghoul, and writing how the first ghoul's life was... This was more of an intro now that I am thinking straight...lol. Thanks for the input... It means a lot from a stranger... For how I usually write this is a bit crappy... I need to touch it up... Your really cool. Hope to talk to you soon.