Attention Creative writers I need help with Origin Story

OK Origin Time The topic goddess Animitius, Greek God Animitius is the God of NEETs Basically cast spells making u fearful of outside world Makes u focus your attention to watch anime main goal to make u a social outcast Write a Myth these requirements has to be Original and use things from natural world Optional can use existing greek gods Winners get the joy of winning

I'm a little bit confused what exactly are you going for here ? and please spell out your words if you are planning to be a writer abbreviations are a nono

@Sota has the right idea. Grammar is the number one rule when writing a story. Unless you're actually aiming to get negativity, grammar is truly what you have to aim for first... that and an actual good plot too. This doesn't seem to have much of either as far as I can tell.

But Style is also important and goes hand in hand with Grammar in a way. I'd recommend doing some reading such as Garner's Modern American Usage, this may also help with you figuring out style http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/ASIN/0205747469/metafilter-20/ref=nosim/ or maybe even this may help you http://www.amazon.com/Elements-Style-Illustrated-William-Strunk/dp/0143112724/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1430626783&sr=8-1&keywords=Illustrated+Strunk+and+White