Critique #1

Thank you for the critique, I was mostly self taught when I was learning to draw, so there is a crudeness to my stlye as its not yet fully refined yet

Here are some examples of redlines: http://www.deviantart.com/art/Child-proportions-Redline-correction-UPDATED-307072736 http://www.deviantart.com/art/Correction-for-Wilthius-473536034 http://www.deviantart.com/art/Correction-188-301412964

@Rina: To be honest, I don't like it when people do redline corrections, since it tends to suck out the style of the original artist. And the 2nd link you posted, the redline just looks horrible. When he redid the original art, he literally ruined the beautiful style and made it into this grotesque art with HORRIBLE lining (like wtf, that's some shitty lining he did on a pretty sketch). As for your art, Mumbling Artist, I think it looks great. I could add on critiques, but it's fairly obvious it's a sketch, so I won't say stuff like, "OH, MORE SHINE" or "MORE SCREENTONE"

@Cielle um okay? I am keeping in mind the style. But there is a different between style and not knowing anatomy. You can have a style with different proportions than what is "ideal" or "realistic," but if it is inconsistent, then it doesn't work and it looks like a bad accident or it looks as if the artist doesn't know how perspective, line, shade, etc, works. If you are stylizing, be consistent about it and make it make sense. If the eyes aren't leveled, then there must be a reason to it! If it is because you don't know how to align eyes, then that is not a style. Not saying it is bad. But Mumbling is asking for a CRITIQUE so obviously, he is asking for help. Edit: Also, I asked him and he said go for it.

I am not done but this is how I see how the original anatomy is done. Not my fixes: http://i925.photobucket.com/albums/ad100/rinakitto/redraw_zpsgb3zolk9.png 1. The forehead has little room to be a forehead; looks small and I am not sure it looks intentional because the face behind the shoulder seems very long. In addition, the eyes are not too well in perspective to make it obvious of the shape the face. 2. The neck and the back along with the shoulder blades don't look well connected. The neck would have to stretch very far in order to get into that position with the placement of the two hands. 3. His right hand is a bit awkward in that position, with the fingers coming up like that and with those two fingers and the thumb showing. Seems like, again, he would really have to stretch and spread his finger apart in order to make that pose. 4. His right leg is either short, which is fine, but it looks more like your were trying to make it foreshortened. Also, the thigh to the knee is longer than the knee to the ankles on the left leg.

If he's asking for help, then it's all good; I didn't mean to sound so offensive. Except, for that second one you linked. That's atrocious. That's something one SHOULDN'T do. I'm okay with everything else but that link.